Writing a Recount Introduction

We are learning to write an introduction for a recount.

What does it need?  Together we came up with a success criteria:

• we will tell, who, what, when, why, where, how
• we will use capital letters at the beginning of sentences
• we will use fullstops at the end of sentences
• we will use past tense
• we will use first person (I, we, me)
• we will use an interesting and impacting first sentence to capture the audiences' interest.

So, do you think we have met our criteria?  Have a read at what the students have written so far.

Eww!  Yuck!  What was she thinking?  I looked at what Ms. Mannix had put on the plate.  I was shocked in terror.  Our group of six were scared that Ms. Mannix was going to poison us!

Ella

Bang!  An explosion of death-defying flavours hit the back of your throat!  Ms. Mannix, the torturer, gathered food from hell.  We were stuck in a small room.  Who was first?  Matt, Ella, Gideon, Chelsea, Ethan or me?  She gave us some 'drum' sticks.  How were we going to eat with them?  I thought, "If these are my last words, I have died on Tuesday 21 July at Broadgreen."

Shaun

Disgusting!  Did I eat that?  Our group of six had the delightful chance to try four disgusting foods from Asia.  I was starting to think Ms. Mannix didn't like us.

Chelsea

I opened the door, my knees shaking.  I look at the food that was uncovered, my taste buds were going to blow... 3, 2, 1... bang!  This looked like a dogs breakfast.  Did she expect us to eat that?  The six of us thought Ms. Mannix was going to murder with food.  I always suspected it but never knew until then.

Ethan

Gross.  Those dried anchovies were disgusting.  Most of our group was scared.  Ms. Mannix uncovered the plate with the paper towel on Tuesday the 21st of July at Broadgreen.  "Why are we doing this?" I thought to myself.  "How much money did she spend on us?  Is she trying to murder me with food?"

Gideon

Welcome to the emotion roller coaster that will destroy and revive your taste buds! ...
To be completed soon
Matt

Asian Food Tasting Experience

Our new writing genre is recount.  A recount is a recording of events that have happened. It has specific structure and features that makes it a recount.  

So students had a shared experience to write about, I bought in four Asian snacks for the students to try.  Let's just say, the looks on their faces when I uncovered the dish of "goodies" was priceless....!! ;)

Using chopsticks to pick up the items was an experience in itself.  Trying the dried anchovies, baked banana chips, seaweed, and spicy broad beans was a challenge and experience the students won't forget in a hurry!  Some students were keen to give things a try, others found it something out of their comfort zone!  The spicy broad beans were a hit and we all ate the rest of the packet!  Success with the chopsticks was varied - some picked it up really quickly, others struggled to pick up anything but kept trying!

Students recorded information about the smell, look, feel, and taste, plus any comments and thoughts.  

Tomorrow we will start formulating a report!  Enjoy the pictures!!

Ms. M

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Creative Writing.....

What would this journey be like??!  Would you be scared?  Here is what the students came up with for a short story, staring with....

"I sat on my bike and looked..."

I felt scared.  "I don't wanna do this," I said to myself.

I looked down where it was going to end.  Is there water?  Am I going to fall off?  I pushed off with my shaking feet.  I went over the bumps, the track never ended.  I started to go sliding off my seat.  My hands were frozen from the cold air.  I jammed the brake on and my back wheel stopped.  I flew over my handle bars and slammed on the slide.

Ella

I saw my dad behind me.  He said, "Come on!"  So I took a big breath and closed my eyes.  I pushed the pedal and.... I started screaming, super-loud like a jet.  I was also going super fast like a jet.  After two and a half minutes and halfway down, I was still screaming.  BANG!!!  I'm in bed, screaming still but I stop.  I go back to sleep.

Matt

I started leaning forwards and my bike started moving.  I screamed, "I'm going down!"

As I went down the people up the top started putting bubbles down the slide.  I looked down.  I started feeling like I was going to throw up.  I leaned to the side and threw up over the edge.  When I saw the bottom there was water.  I started freaking out.  I fell in the water.   My brain finally stopped going round and round.

Chelsea

I felt dizzy as I fell down the slide.  The cold mist air hit me in the face as I released the pink old rusty bike.  After three minutes I reached the bottom.  Then the bike hit my head, flew into an old tree and hugged it.  In the end I broke both legs and my right arm.

Shaun

I felt scared.  What will happen when I get to the bottom?  What is at the bottom, in fact?  Just then, I heard someone running to me.  "Stop!!" I screamed but I said it too late.  I was already going down the slide at 150 miles an hour.  

"Help!" I screamed.

Ethan

I sat on my bike and looked for any chance of death.  Looking down for so long was bad and I closed my eyes and let go of he brakes.  The first jump came and I landed it with a big THUD!  After that, the second jump came and I lost my bike, so I activated my parachute.  I floated down safely and landed.

Gideon

Winter Poems

Winter

If winter was a colour
It would be a thick bright blue.
If winter was a feeling
It would be as cold as a freezer.
If winter was a smell
It would be like thick, brown hot chocolate.
If winter was a sound
It would be as loud as a winter wolf, howling in the forest.
Winter is snow frozen on ice.

Gideon


If winter was a colour
It would be a thick white
If winter was a feeling
It would be a cold thick layer of smashing ice towards your face.
If winter was a smell
It would be a very inviting tomato soup
If winter was a sound
It would be like hearing the kettle whistling on the stove.
Winter is chilly.

Ethan


If winter was a colour
It would be a frosty icing with a deep dark blue core.
If winter was a feeling
It would be a cold jet boring into you.
If winter was a smell
It would be a big pork roast that was cooked to perfection.
If winter was a sound
It would be a cracking roar as you walk across thin ice with wild wind racing at you.
Winter is ice.

Shaun


If winter was a colour
It would be a sharp icy blue.
If winter was a feeling
It would be like shaking hands with a snowman.
If winter was a smell
It would be like eating a bowl of boiling rice pudding.
If winter was a wound
It would be like hot wood popping in a toasty fire.
Winter is a blizzard.

Chelsea


If winter was a colour
It would be a soft light white.
If winter was a feeling
It would be frost bitten fingers.
If winter was a smell
It would be my mum's hot and yummy roast.
If winter was a sound
It would be a cracking hot fire.
Winter is freezing.

Matt


If winter was a colour
It would be frosty ice white.
If winter was a feeling
It would feel like your face was on fire.
If winter was a smell
It would be like hot bubbling chicken soup.
If winter was a sound
It would be like milk getting whipped up for a hot chocolate.
Winter is snowflakes.

Ella


If winter was a colour
It would be a dull lifeless grey.
If winter was a feeling
It would be pinched cheeks and runny noses.
If winter was a smell
It would be the hearty aroma of a bowl of veggie soup.
If winter was a sound
It would be whistling, whirling wind and crunching ice.
Winter is hibernating.

Ms. M

Report Writing - Researching

Now that we are completely revolted-out by instructional writing, we are now moving onto writing reports.  Yesterday we sat down and talked about the purpose of writing a report - to share information, to educate, and to find out.

We decided we would write reports on an animal of choice - not a typical cat or dog, but a type of animal that it would be interesting to learn about.

As a group, we set the criteria of what the structure of our report would look like:

1. title
2. introduction - animal, classification, country it is found, size, predator/prey
3. habitat - where it lives
4. diet - what it eats
5. body covering - fur/feathers/scales/skin - can it camouflage?
6. life cycle
7. interesting facts
8. conclusion - is it endangered?

We made a small booklet to keep our notes in.  Students then decided what animal they wanted to find out more about.

• Chelsea - cheetah
• Gideon - leopard
• Ella - serval
• Matt - meerkat
• Ethan - praying mantis
• Shaun - salt water crocodile
• Ms. M - orca

However, we also discussed that this might change, depending on the availability of information we could find.

Today we went to the BIS library to start our research about our animals.  We got out encyclopaedias and found that most animal information is located in the non-fiction section around the 590s.

Next, we walked down to Infused in Stoke to have a hot chocolate (needed by all budding writers to help with inspiration :) ) and discussed what a bibliography was, its purpose, and what information is needed.  We also talked about how we were going to find information in the texts we find:

- use an index

- look for main ideas in the text that covered the categories we had selected

- make short notes in our booklet under the titles (we can write full sentences later)

- use skimming and scanning techniques to find specific information

Our next stop was Stoke Library where a lovely librarian gave us a lot of her time and helped us source books on our various animals.  Gideon, Ethan and Shaun found that they needed to change their topic (leopard, praying mantis, saltwater crocodile) and then were able to find more information for their report.

Unfortunately, time just went too quickly.  We are hoping to make a return trip tomorrow to get more information from the books we found - at least we now know where to find them!  What a lovely morning out doing some writing!!


Ms. M

Revolting Recipes

How did we get inspired to write our own 'revolting recipes'?  Here is our inspiration.

PUKEY PANCAKES

Goal:

To make my Family puke

Ingredients:

1C Of boogers,

4t Of freshly picked men's hair,

3 mouldy eggs,

2 pig kidneys,

3C Of black sand

Equipment:

Bowl

Wooden spoon

Whisk

Frying pan

Chopping board

Method:

1. First get the bowl and crack 3 eggs into it. Get the spoon and stir until smooth.

2. Next add the black sand into the mixture and stir until thick.

3. Third pick up the knife and put the kidneys onto a chopping board and chop into little pieces.

4. Now use the hair and with your mixture slowly add it while stirring.

5. Open the drawer, get out the frying pan and put on the element. Slowly spread the mixture on the pan.

6. Wait until your mixture is cooked. You will now it is cooked when light and fluffy.

7. Turn over and cook the other side.

8. After you’ve done that add the kidneys to the pancake.

NOW YOU CAN EAT!!!!!!!!

By Ethan

                                  Pig brain salami

Ingredients:

10 rusty nails

2 by 2m of cow skin

2 Crushed up brick with a pinch of dynamite

2 mutated bats

1 L of mushed up vegetables

5 kg of 1 year old pig brains

Equipment:

1 mincer from a giants castle

142 gallon drum

1 tree

1 BBQ

Method:

1. First dump all of the ingredients except the 10 rusty nails and cow skin into the 42 gallon drum and start mixing for a hour with the tree.

2. Now mince up the the tree and put it in the drum.

3.Next lay out the cow skin with 6 rusty nails to make it into a cylinder block up one end with 2 nails.

4.Clean the giants mincer,grap off any human heads.They don't taste nice.

5.Put the  cow skin cylinder over the end of the mincer.

6.Slowly turn the crank on the mincer until the cow skin cylinder is full.

7.Put the 2 rusty nails in the end of thats open open.

8.Now cook on a BBQ at 1000.c until tender.

9.Finally serve on a plate.

(Tip: Serve with slimy sausages)

Shaun

Pukey Pancakes

Equipment

Pan

Bowl

Wooden spoon

Spatular

1 litre container

Masher

Tea towel (mouldy)

Cake rack

Ingredients

1 Handful cats saliva

2 Half eaten lemons

2 Bottoms of mouldy shoes blended

2 Handfuls of mouldy mashed slugs

5 Mashed rotten potatoes

1 Bottle of maple syrup

METHOD

1.  Gather all of your ingredients and equipment.

2. Then start by sifting the mouldy mashed slugs Into a big bowl.

3. Next make a well in the middle of the slugs and add the cat’s saliva, mix thoroughly.

4. Now get the blended mouldy shoes and sprinkle them on top.  Fold in slowly with a wooden spoon.

5. Then put the frying pan on the stove and turn it on.

6. Next, scoop out some of the mixture and put in the pan.

7. Now when it starts to bubble flip it over.

8. Then wait until the other side bubbles and place it on a cake rack.  Put the mouldy green tea towel over top.

9. After you have done that you can put another one on the pan and do the same thing to the rest of the mixture as well.

10. Let them cool for five minutes.

11. Grab the masher and mash some rotten potatoes.  Spread some on each pancake.

12. Then grab the maple syrup and go crazily on the pancakes.  Next squeeze some lemons on top.

13. Now eat.

Chelsea

Dumpy donuts

Goal:  get anyone to eat this.

Ingredients:

2 handfuls of over-cooked rotting dough

3 L of cow poo

20 handfuls of rotting jawbreakers

2 tons of 3 year old coffee

3 L Old goat's blood

1 L of 2 day old vinegar water

Equipment:

Wooden spoon

Sharp knife

Method:

• Gather all your equipment, wash your hands and get ready to cook.
• Check if you have all your ingredients, and let's get cookin'
• First take the rotting dough and place it on the bench in a circle.
• Now take the cow poo and spread it across the top unevenly around the top of the circle.
• After, take the water, coffee, and blood and spread it on top of it.
• Lastly place the jawbreakers on top of the circle spread evenly.
• Finally freeze it for 1 hour and serve on a plate.

By Gideon

BLOODY BROWNIE

Ingredients:                                                                                       

Two cups of bats blood

1 and a half cups of pigs eyeballs

1 bucketful of horse hair

13g of sugar sand

501g of dandruff

1 cup of baby powder

Equipment:

Wooden spoon

Bowl

Cake tray

Oven

Measuring cups

Weighing scales

Method:

• Gather all of your equipment and get ready to cook.
• Get your bowl and pour your bats blood in with the sugar sand.
• Thirdly add half of the horse hair and the pigs eyeballs and mix.
• Now sift the baby powder.
• Add the other half of the horse hair and mix.
• Spread the mixture on baking paper and place on a baking tray.
• Put the oven on 200 oC.
• After cooking for 6 hours take it out and let it cool on a chopping board.
• When it is cooled down cut it into pieces and put the pieces into a container.

By Ella.


BUM CHEEK BURGERS

Goal: to make people puke.

Ingredients

2 mouldy bugns

½ C 2 day-old blood

3 mouldy lettuces

1 mouldy and bloody tomato

1C puke

1/2C cowpoo

Equipment

sword

plate

greasy BBQ

Method

·      Preheat the BBQ to 200oC.

·      Get 2 mouldy buns and place them on the plate you got.

·      Secondly, get ½ a cup of 2 day old blood and spread it on the bread.

·      Thirdly get three mouldy lettuces and put them on the buns.

·      Next, get 1 mouldy and bloody tomato and place it carefully on the bun.

·      After that you want to get your BBQ and your ½ cup of cow poo.  Put the cow poo on the BBQ and flip it over when it has been five seconds.  Cook for another five seconds then take off.

·      After that put the patty on the bun with 1 cup of puke.

·      Finally put the second mouldy bun on and eat.

Matt